This Side of Paradise

My first comment is why is the guitar so far back and too much verb.

It is an interesting progression, lots of dominant ninth's and then the minor chorus, cool.

I think a rethink of the mix would help.

A more active bass line would also liven it up. I like the concept but it almost sounds like a phyrgian jam instead of a tune.

Emphasize the melody, and I miss the restament of the change at around 25 seconds in. Keep the double stops, awesome.

I know this is a work in progress, just tryin to help.